廣東一模續(xù)寫

para1 with desperate tears,she suddenly spotted a boat with a figure walking on it.

①銜接首句心里描寫（心里/a sense of help）

A sense of hope well up in my mind/flooded into her heart/took hold of her.

②情節(jié)推動(dòng)（我讓他注意到我，并救了我，我讓他繼續(xù)救我的爸爸和妹妹，得救了）

she waved her hand with all her strength,yelling constantly.To her relief,the person caught sight of her and header towards her at the top speed.Thanks to his aid,she was carrid safely to the boat but soon she said anxiously in a trembling voice,“My dad …and my sister… there.please! help !”upon hearing this,he,without hesitation,jumped into the water.Despite the strong currents,he kept on swimming against all odds until he noticed them struggling in the water and rescued them.Exhausted as they were,they eventually managed to get on board,all breathing a sigh of relief.

③和第二段首句銜接（爸爸妹妹也上了船）

para 2 once resuced,they were rushed to shore,where a concerned group waited for their arrival.

先是和親人大哭擁抱、醫(yī)生檢查沒有問題、向救命恩人感謝

no sooner had they stepped on the land the some of their relatives rushed to them and hugged them tightly,tears of gratitude/thrilled/excited rolling down the cheeks.provided with some blankets and hot water,they also had their? body check by several doctors and nurses.fortunately,the doctors explained they were slightly injured and would recover? soon after a break.when asked how survived,kiana replied,“Had it been for a man’ s assistance,we would have lost our lives.”much to everyone’s surprise,it was not until we would like to show our gratitude to him that we realized that he had already left silently.?